Second Person Attempt 1

Author's Note:

I am trying a prompt from the write practice of writing in second person. This is probably going to suck, but please provide feedback.

         Your feet pound on the pavement. Your heart is racing, and your blood pulsing. You have to stop the train. You push against the slow-moving crowds of people keeping you from the platform. You aren't going to make, and you don't want to think about what is going to happen because of it.You hear the blow of a whistle and the screech of wheels starting to move. Just then you push through the crowd to an area you can see. The train  is pulling out of the station. You push the obtuse man next to you out of the way and push your legs as fast as they can. As you reach the edge of the platform it seems as if the whole world has gone still. You don't stop. You don't think. You just Jump.